‘OBU Marker-Speak’ - What the Marker Feedback really meant…

After I read the resubmission guide, I have two more questions. 1. I do not have to use the same mentor for a resubmission, so I can choose another mentor. If I choose another mentor, should I do the PowerPoint Presentation to the new mentor? 2. According to the guide, student need to updated the financial statements for resubmission of topic 8. My RR passed but I SLS failed. Do I need to update the financial statements and recalculate the ratios, then update the ratios to my presentation slides? Thank you very much.

Trephena according to my understanding I have to amend my presentation slides ( Communication inc presentation) and not the SLS 4 questions (self reflection)? If I am wrong please correct me. I am facing difficulty in understanding the changes in RR if you could guide me it would be of great help. Thanks

Please confirm me about 500 words statement where do I need to include it?

Trephena please guide me I am waiting for your response. Thanks

@Aqsa - Apologies for the delay it has been a very busy week in both the work and social front for me. I think your feedback is fairly clear. For a pass in evaluation and analysis you need to provide more insight into what has gone on. As the marker says, your explanations seemed to lack depth: so more research is required. Did you read the CEO and directors' reports? Did you consider the management plans and strategies? Did you trace their strategic decisions through the 3 year results? Did you start part 3 with the application of the models and link these factors to your analysis by showing how they influenced decisions and impacted on the company performance? It seems you used a limited amount of sources - the annual report is useful but it needs to be supplemented by articles from trade and business journals and the like. If a student follows the Open Tuition Ultimate Guide to referencing your RAP - on our homepage www.opentuition.com/obu there should not an issue with referencing. Reading between the lines I think there were a few things that might have annoyed the marker here: possibly statements of the obvious, explanations that may have involved just comments that related to why a figure changed but not the deep down reasons that had really caused it (e.g. operating profit decreased because administration, staff costs and depreciation rose type of thing); wrong placement of references with stacked references (which I deal with in our guide) and some graphs that were not clearly labelled. Use my article on the Resubmission statement (on the homepage) to help sort out and address your weaknesses. It is loaded as a separate document with your resubmission. Your written SLS statement (8) was passed but you need to sort out your presentation. Do what the marker said but amend and update the slides when you have revised the report.

@czp021 - if all sections (1) through (7) received a pass and there is a grade of anything other than F after part 7 but before part 8 then it means all elements of your report passed so you do not need to update and resubmit it. With the SLS you will need to resubmit both ekements: statement and slides. With the written part Q1 think about your 'journey' from being a student just studying for exams to producing a 7,500 word report - What skills dis you lack? What did you find hard? What was easy? How did you overcome the difficulties? Looking back what significant things were learned specific to doing academic work. ( It is a bit like a sort of personal SWOT analysis) Q2 - this is supposed to be approached from how you feel you did with regard to achieving your objectives not what you did to achieve them. Consider the challenges and anything that you might have done better. Think off what might have impeded you and any set backs or what went particularly well. You don't have to rewrite Q3 and 4 but you could improve them if you felt this was appropriate. You won't have to recalculate all the ratios just make it a coherent presentation and do as the marker has asked. And yes you can change or keep the same mentor it's up to you.

@trephena I failed my RAP on RR with the following comments; 2. Application of accountancy/business models Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: You have not provided a tally sheet of all the responses from each respondent and consequently much of your analysis is not supported by evidence. For example, you quote Kovach 'As employees get older, interesting work becomes more of a motivator. ...'This can be seen from the results of questionnaire. This indicates that older employees stayed in their jobs longer because they found it more motivating'. There is no evidence in the survey responses to support your statement. You use the word 'average' several times in your project but this term does not describe the situation. For example, on page 13 you write 'the exact level of motivation amongst MPT cannot be expressed in absolute terms. However, it is safe to say that most employees are motivated above average'. On page 18 you write 'MPT had an average tenure therefore indicating average level of motivation'. These two statements can not both be correct. There is no evidence to support your analysis of either and both statements. The process of constructing a Research Report must be logical, rational and scientific. You should not read things into your findings which are not there. 3. Evaluation of information, analysis and conclusions Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: Your conclusion would appear to be more appropriate in your Skills and Learning Statement. Your recommendations do not stem from the application of theory/concepts and your findings. For example, on supervision, 100% did not disagree with the statement 'My supervisor is very professional and supportive' but you write 'Some supervisors have an autocratic style of supervision and this style of leadership does not inspire motivation especially in a service industry like MPT. I therefore recommend that these supervisors be sponsored for professional development courses.' Similarly on remuneration you recommend an increase to industry averages partly to 'retain talented employees', but staff turnover in the last year was 0%. Please check your work for inconsistencies. You must relate your findings to the theories more: compare and contrast what you have found to the theories that you have selected. 4. Presentation of project findings Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: On page 12 you identify the 'Key Factors' driving employee motivation in Mukuba Pension Trust, and on pages 13 and 14 you give the 'Results of the Research'. These precede the 'Questionnaire Findings' on pages 16-27. The process of constructing a Research Report must be logical, rational and scientific: this means that your results should come after your findings. 7. Information Technology Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: You have not provided sufficient evidence of having used a spreadsheet in preparing the project report. You should produce a tally sheet of the responses of each individual to the questions asked in a spreadsheet. You can use the formula functions to produce tables, and its chart/graph functions to produce diagrams etc to illustrate your results. Please see the Information Pack p.56 "You MUST upload your Excel spreadsheet file (.xlsx or .xls) as an appendix. The spreadsheet MUST demonstrate use of appropriate formulae. (Screenshots or PDF files of a spreadsheet are NOT acceptable. Please advise if I need to redo the entire RR. Thanks.

I failed the rap just on referencing . Did I do a mistake by using the in text citation ?as it generated many anon ? authors . I am not really sure how to do it ? resubmission means i just correct the referencing ??

@trephena Hi guys I failed, and this the feed back from my marker. Please give me advice about this 1. Understanding of accountancy/business model - PASS 2. Application of accountancy/business models - Fail You have tried to apply too many models so your application is rather superficial in places The Balanced scorecard is not really suitable unless you have access to internal information and data and with the Porter's 5 Forces suppliers extends to more than just those producing the aircraft Please stick to the original reporting currencies for the companies as used in their annual report 3. Evaluation of information, analysis and conclusions - Fail The point of comparator analysis is to provide a benchmark from which you can begin to dig into the different management decisions that explain differences in performance. You must therefore expand your analysis to give reasons and explanations as to the differences in performance between the two companies, despite existing in the same industry and suffering similar external influences. Please remember that you have an upper limit on word count of 7,500. You have at least another 500 words to expand your analysis. And if you delete the QR section on p20, which adds nothing since an airlines inventory is so low, and remove the SWOT analysis of Virgin, your comparator company, you should easily be able to show breadth and depth in your financial analysis section to enable you to pass next time 4. Presentation of project findings - Pass 5. Communication - Pass 6. Information gathering and Refrencing - Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: You have a range of sources in your list of references, so it may be that you need to go back to these and read them more wisely to use the material to strengthen your understanding of the airline industry and of the companies that you discuss. However it may be that you need to go beyond these sources and carry out a bit more research. You must reference all of your work thoroughly so please consult Appendix 3 of the Information Pack for help with this as every fact, opinion and use of the work of others including annual reports and graphs should be attributed. 7. Information Technology - Pass There is some question that i will ask you. 1. With this feedback, do you think i should revised and change my part 1 and part 2 ? i knew i done terrible in part 3. But as i feel the feedback is more critize about part 3 and there nothing wrong in my part 1 and 2. 2. Should i analize and explain what good or bad for competitor ? 3. What is good in my thesis and what is bad ?

I have summit my RAP during period 34, and got FAIL result on topic 8. My mentor told me it was quiet well done, i was confused when i saw the markers comments. There is one part i still confused which is marking criteria NO.7 Information Technology. i had used graphics and charts in my RAP, table looks like this: (included original data formula and the calculation process + Graphic and chart presentation ) Year 2014 2015 2016 GSK Current asset (£ m) 14,678 16,587 16,711 Inventory (£ m) 4231 4716 5102 Current liability (£ m) 13,295 13,417 19,001 Current Ratios Current asset / Current liability 1.1 1.2 0.9 Quick Ratios Current asset – inventory Current liability 0.8 0.9 0.6 I can't copy the graphic chart here, but it is already in my RAP Here is the markers comments: In order to be ale to pass there needs to be evidence of you producing a spreadsheet in your RAP. All you have done is to cut and paste the GSK report financials into your work and haven't produced them yourself. This needs to be put right if you are to pass the resubmission. Please ensure that you load a spreadsheet for your resubmission that shows how you can manipulate data using formulae and how you constructed your graphs from the figures ____________________________________________________________________ obviously, i didn't just cut and paste, i have included all the calculation procedures in my RAP table like above, the table i used is just a re-design form of my excel spreadsheet, could i get some advice on this part? THANKS !!! there are 7 parts of RAP and 2 parts in SLS , how many fails parts will produce a failure result ? feel like totally not on the track for this RAP , i'd like better to do a exam. and next thing i will try my best to modify my RAP according to markers comments and hopefully will be a pass grade next time.

my mentor give wrong instruction for the appendix and i put annual report screen short in my appendix , got wrong info totally

@erumrk - it is impossible for me to say why you failed on referencing however it should be set out in the marker feedback unless overall the referencing was poor in a number of areas. Read the Open Tuition Ultimate Guide to Referencing your RAP as that outlines in Part 2 all the rules to follow - find it on our homepage www.opentuition.com/obu If you only failed referencing that should be all you need to correct

@lushinga90 - It is very important that your work is coherent and that anyone reading it can follow it from start to finish and make sense of it. From your feedback comments I detect a sense of frustration from the marker in that part of the workings (the raw data from the questionnaire) was missing, statements were not supported by evidence (and also they were contradictory) and that the work did not flow. Regarding the specific areas failed: 2. Clear detailed workings in the appendices are essential for a questionnaire this means showing how many and how (if you used a Likert scale) people responded to each question . You need to refer the reader back to these workings when making statements. Otherwise they is no evidence to support your claims. Based on the actual data you need to sort out the contradictory statements the marker has highlighted. 3. Analysis needs to be clear and the Conclusion and any Recommendations if made should relate to the report findings. The marker has again pointed out inconsistencies so you should ensure statements relate to facts and evidence 4. This fall probably relates to the inability to follow your work in a logical sequence. As I have mentioned I think the marker became confused and frustrated and at this point they had had enough. Remember these guys and dolls mark dozens of reports and it is not their responsibility to sort out muddled work (and they don't have the time either)- it is the student's job to guide them through the report in a logical manner 7. The marker guidance is clear -so follow it

@qq419850428 From my understanding you included the original data formulae within your RAP (word document) instead of the excel spreadsheet. The marker is saying ‘show your tables, charts, graphs, etc. in your RAP and have the excel spreadsheet as a separate document in which you show how you computed the ratio and how you came up with the graph for example. Put simply, key in figures from the financials into your excel spreadsheet and use excel to calculate ratios. This demonstrates your I.T. skills. To pass the RAP you have to pass all the 7 components. Similarly, to pass the SLS you have to pass all the 2 components. From my experience if you adjust your RAP according to the markers requirements you would pass. Wish you all the best.

thanks man, appreciate

@trephena Hi! Thanks for helping students out on the forums. I just have one simple question. Do I have to redo the whole RAP in the new period as per new industries in topic 8 or just make the necessary changes as per markers comments and submit the same RAP with the changes incorporated? do I have to alter all the sections? If not, will that create issues in turnitin? The result letter suggests to just reflect the changes but I'm confused on how do I go about it. Thanks alot.

here is the marker’s common on Overall Technical and Professional Skills: _______________________________________________________________________You are advised to start your findings with the application of the models as these are intended to guide the subsequent financial analysis and not be an exercise done in isolation to everything else. Read through the CEO and directors’ reports for the period and use these to identify the strategic management decisions they will have taken on the basis of the factors present in their business environments (i.e. observe how these decisions have been influenced by the factors present in the application of the SWOT and PESTLE / Porters 5 Forces). You should then track through and see how such decisions have impacted on financial performance _______________________________________________________________________ all my friends did this separately models after financial analysis , but they did pass this part, and here he just request me to blend them together i am confused …

@Edwin - the overall impression I get is that you may have tried to be too ambitious in places and by trying to cover too many things your analysis was not deep enough in Part 3. Essentially it seems they want you to use the word count more effectively In answer to your specific points: 1. You should edit Parts 1 and 2 where appropriate e.g. removing any theory on the Balanced Scorecard etc. (I suggest you stick with the tried and trusted SWOT and PESTLE - they are enough) 2. Although the marker told you to remove the actual SWOT on the comparator, you should use the factors and knowledge you have gained from this when discussing the differences in the two companies' performances as that will bring in some depth to your analysis. 3. It is impossible for me to give a knowledgeable opinion as I haven't read your RAP, however it seems as well as lack of depth in the evaluation, the referencing was not up to standard. This can be remedied by reading both Appendix 3 of the Information Pack and also 'the Open Tuition Ultimate Guide to Referencing your RAP' (a much more readable and practical guide as I have tried to set out clear rules to follow in Part 2) - this is on our homepage www.opentuition.com/obu I would also suggest that you read the posts on 'Using an AIRLINE for Topic 8' as I give a lot of tips on that Forum topic thread in relation to conducting an appropriate analysis and evaluation (go to the second page of our topic title list where it is currently or use the Search facility to find it)

@qq419850428 - forget about what your friends did that is irrelevant because this comment (a) was about your work and (b) if it was in 'Overall Technical and Professional Skills' (as opposed to any actual assessment criteria number) so has been put in there more as guidance on how to improve your work. I concur completely with this advice particularly the comments on the business analysis and application of the models: " these are intended to guide the subsequent financial analysis and not be an exercise done in isolation to everything else"' You need to appreciate that in the Real World companies make decisions based on their strengths and opportunities and these are influenced by economic, political, technological factors etc - in other words the SWOT and PESTLE have a massive impact on their strategies, performance and financial results. It defies logic to just stick a SWOT and PESTLE in at the end as it ignores its importance (it also demonstrates a 'tick-box' mentality to your work - obviously if all your friends also did this I suspect you have a dud mentor who doesn't really appreciate the intricacies of the RAP and report writing!) The whole purpose of making students do an application of the models is to get them to think about the company in a realistic business environment - which is what your marker is trying to tell you by saying you need to blend the business and financial together. When explaining percentages in the financial analysis relate the explanations more closely to the actual strategies and business environment

@Waqas - if you consult the latest Information Pack you will see the new industry sectors only apply to new and first submissions. For a failed P34 RAP (or from before P34) you are permitted to resubmit on your original company (however if you change company it must be to one of the new industry sectors if doing Topic 8). OBU has removed the need to use the latest financial statements to update your work provided your original attempt was on the same company and was submitted in one the last 3 periods.

Thanks for your reply! Further, Should I rewrite the whole RAP or just the parts marked fail? The marker suggests that I use more resources as I have over relied on the annual report. Even though most of the information I provided in the RR was clearly stated in the annual report, like strategic changes. Anyway, could you provide me with your feedback on this: 3. Evaluation of information, analysis and conclusions Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: You have analysed appropriate areas of Delta, but the coverage is mainly of a descriptive nature. This fact is underlined by the lack of overall referencing throughout your analysis section with very few references other than a couple relating to Delta annual reports. You need therefore, to gather further research relating to the underlying reasons for the good/bad performance of Delta in comparison to your chosen comparator so that you are analytical and show where you sourced the ideas and insights from. Having clearer project objectives at the outset will also allow you to reach more exact and effective conclusions at the end of your RAP as well.Your number 4 and 6 aren't really objectives. Shall I change all the objectives here or just the objective numbers 4 and 6? Overall Technical and Professional Skills Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: To strengthen your analysis you need to link your business and financial analyses so please read through the CEO and directors' reports for the period. Use these to identify the strategic management decisions they will have taken on the basis of the factors present in their business environments (i.e. observe how these decisions have been influenced by the factors present in the application of the SWOT and PESTLE/ Porter's 5 Forces). You should then track through and see how such decisions have impacted on financial performance and this will help you explain the reasons that lie behind the changes rather than just offering numerical explanations. As you have chosen an airline you should attempt to introduce some KPIs that are used in the airline sector alongside the conventional ratio analysis e.g. load factors, costs/revenues per available seat per kilometre [Mile] known as ASK or ASM; yield per passenger; aircraft utilisation, as again this would help with a better analysis / evaluation (these KPIs are often in the annual report). I used the above mentioned KPIs for reasoning of the ratio analysis. What else does the marker want me to do with the KPIs? 6. Information gathering and Referencing Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: As I pointed out in 3 above there was a general lack of referencing in your submission. There needs to be evidence of you having done sufficient research around Delta to be able to talk with authority about their performance over the 3-year period you are looking at. This research then needs to be referenced effectively within your work so that it adds weight to your argument and you win the confidence of the reader that you know what you are talking about in an analytical and not descriptive sense. Application of the models is not intended to be an exercise done in isolation from the rest of the analysis.as the point of the business analysis is to inform and guide the evaluation of financial performance. As mentioned previously blending the business and financial analyses together should provide greater insights into what lies behind the financial analysis. I know that I made a huge blunder here by relying on the annual report and this point seems very fair to me. I need to understand how do I blend the business models with the ratio analysis? Final Question: Should I rewrite the whole RR or just reflect the markers comments in the report? For example, do I need to rewrite the objectives? but that would lead to make changes for the rest of the report.

Thanks for reply , does that mean I should write models and financial analysis together ? Like each paragraph got both bit of these two parts , or I just bring ahead the business models part in front of the financial part ?

Hi qq419850428, covering a little for Trephena as she is away. You can place the business models ahead of the financial parts. Mixing them together with the financial analysis leads to a loss of structure and also the possibility that you do miss out key business points.

Hi Waqas Allow me to answer in point form 1) yes, over reliance on annual reports is a common reason for failure. The annual reports can give an idea of areas to explore but seek validation of those ideas from a diversified base of sources from analysts, trade associations, newspapers etc 2) Yes. Remove objective 4 and 6 as per the examiner's comments (unless u strongly disageee with them) You are also encouraged to examine your remaining objectives and see if you really were aiming to achieve them. 3) link your business and financial analysis. Show how the business factors affects the financial results. 4) for the KPIs, it seems that you may not have used it meaningfully (or the examiner may have missed spotting it). Use the KPIs to meaningfully explain and support the key ratios. If need be, create a small subheading to bring emphasis to your usage of them. 5) yes, it looks like there needs to be quite a lot of rewriting of the report. Especially the linking of financial analysis with business. Eg the fall in oil prices meant that competitors started lowering ticket prices due to lower operating costs. This price competition affected the revenue of Delta as it also had to lower its ticket prices in response. Going by the examiner's comments, it does look like you should adopt the mindset that all is up for change. Even adding new references from sources would mean extra changes to the parts that may have received a pass.

@LearningLuminarium @trephena thanks you, found that lot of information in these forum are vital and indeedly important, but bad thing is i totally ignored and run out of the road on my first submission, once agian aprreciated your comments

Hi Trephena and Mentors, Topic No:20- Failed First Attempt Please find the examiners comments bellow, any advice, whether it be minute would be much appreciated. Also kindly address my queries below too. Many Thanks. ______________________________________________________________________ Examiner Comments: 1. Understanding or accountancy/business models: Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: You need to include the limitations of Mendelow's framework. Also make it clear that you are using the UN Global Compact model; the discussion of the GRI could be removed. 2. Application of accountancy/business models:Pass 3.Evaluation of information, analysis and conclusion :Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: Your analysis is very good - you have produced an in-depth and interesting application of CSR at VW to the selected models. There are just two issues that you need to deal with, which are fairly straightforward. Firstly, bench-marking to Toyota. You do not benchmark any CSR beyond 3 ratios and so it is important that you state this on page 2, otherwise the reader is expecting a full comparator analysis across all CSR aspects. Secondly your conclusions should conclude on the research questions set. The research questions need to be revised to achieve this - these should explicitly reflect what you have done in the project: assess CSR practices at VW using Mendelow's framework and Carroll's Pyramid, and bench-marked CSR practice at VW against the GRI. 4. Presentation of project findings: Pass Overall Technical and Professional Skills: Faill 5. Communication: Pass 6. Information gathering and Referencing: Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: You have attempted to reference your work but you need to take more care when doing so. The Harvard system should be used in a systematic basis throughout your report and the citations should be present in the list of references. Likewise the list of references should only contain citations from the report. The Harvard system uses Author family name or Organisation name (date) - this is frequently incorrect in your project. In the list of references you should just include the family name and initials, for example Norton and Hughes (2009) in the report, and then Norton, A. and Hughes, J. (2009). CIMA Official Learning System Enterprise Management. Massachusetts: CIMA Publishing, in the list of references. At times you fail to include the date with the reference in the text. Please also present the list of references alphabetically. It is also important to differentiate sources with the same author and same date - include a,b,c etc. after the date. You also have a tendency to place the reference at the end of the paragraph but this is not always appropriate - think more about the positioning of references to ensure that the statements of fact or opinion of others is acknowledged directly when discussed. 7. Information Technology: Fail Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: You have included a spreadsheet but this has been used as a word document to present the financial statements as well as including a couple of pasted graphs. It is important that you demonstrate your effectiveness in generating data using formula (such as the result of ratios or the sums present in the financial statements) and creating graphs from data that you have inputted. Skills & Learning Statement 8. Self Reflection: Pass 9. Communication Skills (inc Presentation): FAIL Reasons for fail and advice for improvement: You have made a good start on the presentation slides but these are not very engaging and would benefit from some graphs, charts and/or graphics to break up the pages of text. The first 6 slides should be reduced to 3 as the focus of the presentation should be the findings. There are also some other slide which are not needed, for example 8,9,11. Some of the other slides need to be summarized into more succinct bullet points. For example slide 17 would be more effective if it just contained the heading 'ethical responsibilities' plus the bullet points. There is no comparator analysis/benchmarking against the Global Compact evident within the slides but you have included GRI which is not applied in the project. _______________________________________________________________________ Questions: 1. Since I have passed the 'Self Reflection', do i need to do the SLS report again? or leave it as it is , and fix the presentation as the marker suggested? 2. The re-submission statement template that has been provided in the pack, can I simply use that format in a Word file and write my statement, and attach as a separate file while submitting? 3.Any specific suggestions for the Re-submission statement, based on the markers comments on my project? 4. In part 2 of my project, I produced a summary on GRI framework and did the analysis of this framework in pat 3. Now, the marker suggested 'Remove the discussion on GRI', so should i completely delete the GRI part both from Part 2 and 3? 5.Further, on this GRI framework point, the marker said in point number 3, last line, "Benchmark CSR Practices of VW against the GRI" So does the marker want me to keep GRI or remove? I am a bit confused about the suggestion regarding this framework. Please suggest Many Many Thanks for your help Warmest Regards

Hi, My first research report unfortunately 'failed to achieve a pass' (I love how they word that), and in my feedback it refers to my use of PEST and SWOT analysis. It says 'these were only briefly alluded to in the main body of your RAP but were shown in more detail in the appendix. The appendix was over your word count hence these could not be used to assess whether you have undertaken a pass standard evaluation and analysis'. But in the information pack it says that the appendices shouldn't be included in your word count, so I'm slightly confused as to whether I have misunderstood the use of an appendix or whether the markers comment is contradictory to the information pack? I'm assuming it's the former, as the report appears to have been checked by a moderator and I have full faith in the marker, however I was wondering if someone would be able to either clarify this for me or point me in the right direction of where I can get clarification? I have spoken to my mentor however he is also unsure, although he's going to find out if he can get more information (he's a colleague and I'm his first mentee). Thanks in advance for any help you can offer.

@arrembee The appendices should only contain ancillary material - the full SWOT and PEST should always be in the body of the report for the main company (although if you do one for the competitor it would be permissible for this to be in the appendices). I think there is some ambiguity here - my interpretation is that your report was already up to the word count as you are correct there are no limitations placed on the appendices. So what I think the marker is saying is that they might have made an allowance for your SWOT etc being inadvertently in the appendices and marked it as if in the report however they could not do this as you had more or less already exceeded the 7,500 limit. Markers are instructed to be strict about the word count otherwise it is unfair for students who have complied with it so ways deemed to be made to circumvent. the word count is dealt with as if it formed part of the actual word count (Usually this is over use of tables that could have been in MS Word but posted as images to avoid being picked up by the word count: they will be considered as part of the word count by estimating the number of words they contain and added back). You are correct - all failed work is moderated and the moderator should have reached the same conclusion as the marker (otherwise things are changed e.g. a fail could become a pass). I doubt you will be able to get further clarification the system does not seem to be geared up to giving any extra feedback (I suspect otherwise they would be inundated). Hope that helps (please note though we have a proper thread dealing with marker feedback 'OBU marker-speak - what the feedback really meant' so that is where feedback queries are supposed to be posted and the reason I have closed this thread)

1. You can just leave the SLS statement and focus on improving the Presentation slides however you may need to upload the SLS file when resubmitting 2. The actual format of the resubmission statement is not critical however the content is so as long as you produce some form of resubmission statement that will be find 3. Personally I think you sound as if you had a bit of a nit-picker as a marker :-( For actual advice on writing the Resubmission statement please see my article on the homepage Just go along with what they say for [1]. I am confused myself about the comments regarding GRI - so just be honest and say you are confused about the feedback and state why (you are UNlikely - unless you are really unlucky - to get the same marker next time around - and I know of one marker who actually tells students to use GRI !!!!). In relation to [3] can you do some benchmarking and ratios about charitable initiatives as that falls within Carroll's? (there is one marker who is passionate about objective analysis of charitable donations !!!!) e.g. charitable donations as a percentage of net profits for 3 years for both companies and comparisons with the trend (whether they are increasing/decreasing) and going in the same direction as dividends. The aim here would be to show whether the company's altruism is in line with its distributions to shareholders. The conclusions should summarise the key findings and relate these back to the initial research objectives 4. As I say, I am confused about this so unless you have word count problems you could just leave it in unless what they meant is that your discussion of GRI was a bit tangential and not really to the point (so maybe edit it?). 5. Can you do a bit of this??? If you can, do it - otherwise say that you have benchmarked against Toyota for consistency (something your marker clearly isn't!!! haha) I really feel that "Your analysis is very good" tends to indicate that your report only marginally failed. Ensure that you include a few more ratios and some new material (as they can see from the Turnitin score how much is from your last submission). By the way I have included a few comments specifically about VW on the T20 forum topic thread so read last the few pages and that might also help give you a few ideas. Good luck! :-D

As evidence of this you must submit a copy of your presentation in your Skills and Learning Statement.