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”Your analysis section is weak. You do address some of the changes in an attempt to explain them but neither in enough detail or in a coherent manner. You would be advised to start with an analysis of revenue and then look at profitability – even if this means removing some of the Balance sheet ratios. Even better would be to carry out your business analysis first as this will help inform your financial analysis. There are numerous examples of where improvements could be made but for instance p14Electricity tariff for industrial sector has had a massive boost between 25%-94.42% depending on their category and various slabs so there is 0% subsidy for the industrial sector. All electric supply companies are due to witness cut downs as subsidy initially approved was revoked, cut down PKR.396 billion in subsidy, and raised the tariff as well (Kiani, 2013). I really cannot follow what you have written or the meaning it has on profitability of GSK. You also need to utilise external sources better – much of your analysis relies upon GSK own accounts which are unlikely to be wholly objective. You need to use 3rd parties to corroborate your statements. You also need to make sure that you don’t repeat in your text what is shown in graphs, or simply rely on representing the various components of a ratio in different ways. e.g. changes in ROCE simply explained by % change in capital vs change in margin – try and look a little further even if explaining why liabilities have increased. On a positive note your business models are better (except again you rely on annual report, so the analysis is narrowly based) and your conclusion is also good ”
this was my part 3 markers feedback. I have understood my mistake in financial analysis, and that i have less third party information sources. i just want to know about the business analysis part.
Thank you trephena for the feedback.
There is another thing i would like to ask, regarding my business analysis. my topic was 8.
marker said ” On a positive note your business models are better (except again you rely on annual report, so the analysis is narrowly based) and your conclusion is also good.”this means i just have to look for third party sources for referencing ? no need to amend my business analysis. right ?
hello trephena, i would like to get some advice from you on markers feedback of my sls.
It stated ” Your sls I think attempts to demonstrate self reflection but your use of English and the vocabulary you have adopted make it very difficult to understand e.g. while closing all the corners being the nail in the coffin. Your written English is poor you must have someone review your work to ensure it is comprehensible. I would like to see you expand your response to Q2 which is currently very short, and in the main descriptive and I would prefer to see more about the generic skills etc. that you have learnt from the mentor meetings, again you are more descriptive of what occurred rather than how you benefitted. ”
now my question is, i have to just re-write question 2 or whole of my sls?
regards,
ahmed.thankyou trephena,
and with graphs, we have to make them in MS excel and then link to MS word or we can directly make it on MS word( though when making in word, data entry is done in excel windows).
and in information pack it says
”Have you included the relevant pages of the company’s Financial Statements (if necessary)?
(Please do not submit the entire document, copies of the relevant sections are adequate)”
can you elaborate how this has to be done? what is meant by copies of relevant section?
like in directors report reason for variation in gross profit margin is told which i have mentioned in part3, so how do i take out the relevant section of annual report for referencing.is it okay to copy and past, and proper reference it. or we have to write in our words and proper reference it. e.g. definitions of swot , or ratio’s and their limitation in part 2, and in part 3, like in annual report the reason for fall in gross profit is given, so i have to write it in my own words, or just quote it from their and reference it ?